Ребята! Я не очень уверен в переводе обращения с русского на английский на своей страничке Интернета. Может ли кто-нибудь из свободно и грамотно говорящих на английском языке указать на ошибки или неправильные обороты речи?
About me
"Romance - exhibitionism of the soul"
Adon Leon
Welcome!
My name is Savransky Leonid. Stage name “Adon Leon”. I won't undertake the job of defining my music style. Anyway, it’s surely not “boom-boom” nor “pow-pow”. – Not because… (I’ll let you fill the gap as you like) but because I don’t know how to write this kind of music. You see… my music, - it’s just my conception of this world and how do I reflect inside. Untrammeled description of the state of my soul, body and mind. Not long ago, it became very clear to me that expressing my thoughts and my feelings only by music is causing me a great poverty. Thus, for my surprise I began writing lyrics to my music – can anyone call it a poetry? - Well it’s not my place to judge in. Regretfully, what concerns all of my music is that it’s still in a greater absence – because my music and my lyrics are separated (there’s no one to perform the singing part). I do hope that it won’t be a burden to you when you’ll hear my music and read separately my lyrics. Hopefully, one day I could fill this lack - I’d be very happy if someone or maybe one of the professional singers would like accompany with a specific offer.
What’s interesting the most, is that three unfamiliar with each other people had the same line of thought about my music. In their opinion, without any questionable doubt - in my music there is visualization. When you listen to my music and read my lyrics you can easily imagine the main theme in pictures. If what they say is true then maybe professionals would like to make a video-clip to my music? I’m always open for partnership.
In conclusion… I almost forgot, some of my music was written six years ago, practically when I started to be involved with computerized music. I would most definitely remake and rebuild my music very soon. I hope that to you as it for to me, the “main portion” – is the music and the “way of making the main portion” – is marginal but although important as well.
Best regards,
Savransky Leonid, (Adon Leon)
Благодарю всех тех, кто высказался конструктивно по поводу перевода. Вот слегка подправленный вариант:
About me
"Romance - exhibitionism of the soul"
Adon Leon
Hello!
My name is Leonid Savransky, stage name Adon Leon. I won't undertake to define the style of the music I write. In any case it's neither "umtsa-umtsa" nor "pow-pow". Not because... but because I can't. My music it's just my conception of the world and perception of myself in it. It's an untrammeled paraphrase of the state of my soul, body and mind. At some point I came to a conclusion that I can't sufficiently express my thoughts and feelings only through my music and to my own surprise I started to write lyrics. Can I call it a poetry? It's not really my place to judge.
As for my songs, at this point unfortunately music and lyrics come separately. With time I'll try to fill this gap as soon as I find appropriate performers. I'd be glad if any professional singers would like to contact me.
Saying that, I'd like to emphasize that my lyrics are written in Russian language and it will definitely take some time and effort to translate them to English. I'm willing to find professional interpreters who have the ability to work with lyrics and make correct yet "flavorful" poetical translation without requiring any changes to the music.
Interesting that three unfamiliar with each other people said the same thing regarding my music. In their opinion when listening to my music and reading the lyrics you can easily imagine the contents of the song in pictures. If that is true then maybe professionals would like to make a video clip? I'm always open for partnership.
Last thing... Some of my songs were written six years ago, at the time when I was first introduced to the world of computers and computerized music. I'm definitely thinking about remaking these songs. I do hope that for you (as it is for me) the "main course" is the music itself and the "way of cooking" comes next, yet still very important.
Best regards,
Savransky Leonid, (Adon Leon)
About me
"Romance - exhibitionism of the soul"
Adon Leon
Welcome!
My name is Savransky Leonid. Stage name “Adon Leon”. I won't undertake the job of defining my music style. Anyway, it’s surely not “boom-boom” nor “pow-pow”. – Not because… (I’ll let you fill the gap as you like) but because I don’t know how to write this kind of music. You see… my music, - it’s just my conception of this world and how do I reflect inside. Untrammeled description of the state of my soul, body and mind. Not long ago, it became very clear to me that expressing my thoughts and my feelings only by music is causing me a great poverty. Thus, for my surprise I began writing lyrics to my music – can anyone call it a poetry? - Well it’s not my place to judge in. Regretfully, what concerns all of my music is that it’s still in a greater absence – because my music and my lyrics are separated (there’s no one to perform the singing part). I do hope that it won’t be a burden to you when you’ll hear my music and read separately my lyrics. Hopefully, one day I could fill this lack - I’d be very happy if someone or maybe one of the professional singers would like accompany with a specific offer.
What’s interesting the most, is that three unfamiliar with each other people had the same line of thought about my music. In their opinion, without any questionable doubt - in my music there is visualization. When you listen to my music and read my lyrics you can easily imagine the main theme in pictures. If what they say is true then maybe professionals would like to make a video-clip to my music? I’m always open for partnership.
In conclusion… I almost forgot, some of my music was written six years ago, practically when I started to be involved with computerized music. I would most definitely remake and rebuild my music very soon. I hope that to you as it for to me, the “main portion” – is the music and the “way of making the main portion” – is marginal but although important as well.
Best regards,
Savransky Leonid, (Adon Leon)
Благодарю всех тех, кто высказался конструктивно по поводу перевода. Вот слегка подправленный вариант:
About me
"Romance - exhibitionism of the soul"
Adon Leon
Hello!
My name is Leonid Savransky, stage name Adon Leon. I won't undertake to define the style of the music I write. In any case it's neither "umtsa-umtsa" nor "pow-pow". Not because... but because I can't. My music it's just my conception of the world and perception of myself in it. It's an untrammeled paraphrase of the state of my soul, body and mind. At some point I came to a conclusion that I can't sufficiently express my thoughts and feelings only through my music and to my own surprise I started to write lyrics. Can I call it a poetry? It's not really my place to judge.
As for my songs, at this point unfortunately music and lyrics come separately. With time I'll try to fill this gap as soon as I find appropriate performers. I'd be glad if any professional singers would like to contact me.
Saying that, I'd like to emphasize that my lyrics are written in Russian language and it will definitely take some time and effort to translate them to English. I'm willing to find professional interpreters who have the ability to work with lyrics and make correct yet "flavorful" poetical translation without requiring any changes to the music.
Interesting that three unfamiliar with each other people said the same thing regarding my music. In their opinion when listening to my music and reading the lyrics you can easily imagine the contents of the song in pictures. If that is true then maybe professionals would like to make a video clip? I'm always open for partnership.
Last thing... Some of my songs were written six years ago, at the time when I was first introduced to the world of computers and computerized music. I'm definitely thinking about remaking these songs. I do hope that for you (as it is for me) the "main course" is the music itself and the "way of cooking" comes next, yet still very important.
Best regards,
Savransky Leonid, (Adon Leon)
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